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.::SILENCE::. by ~HikariMimamoto:iconHikariMimamoto:

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.::SILENCE::.
By::Hikari Mimamoto


I walked along the sidewalk,
On a rainy day,
The streets were full of people,
Children, Adults, the Elderly,
Some spoke with the person they brought along,
While others chose not to speak and walked alone,
The atmosphere had a busy feeling to it,
But that didn't effect me at all.

I walked along the sidewalk,
Ignoring the business people,
I ignored the little girls and boys,
That were giving out pocket tissues,
I ignored the man that was getting,
Mugged in the alley as he cried for help,
I ignored the kids playing basketball,
Behind the fence.

I walked along the sidewalk,
Realizing the harsh reality that,
I felt alone,
The streets were full of people,
Children, Adults, the Elderly,
Some spoke with the person they brought along,
While others chose not to speak and walked alone,
The atmosphere had a busy feel to it,
But that didn't effect me at all.

I walked along the sidewalk,
Hearing nothing but silence.
©2008-2009 ~HikariMimamoto
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Submitted: May 19, 2008
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I am REALLY not sure about the category. Akira-chan, help me!!!!T_T

Anways, this free verse poem was for L.A. class. I thought of it on the way to school, cause it was all rainy outside, and I was listening to music, but besides the music and th sound of the car and rain, it seemed pretty quiet.

I let some people at my school read it, and so far, everyone liked it. It's a pretty depressing poem, besides the fact that I put a guy getting mugged in there.xDD

I was also thinking of New York City when I was trying to lengthen the poem at school. And I got the "girls and boys that were giving out pocket tissue" thing from like shows. Where people used to try to advertise their business by giving out free stuff.

Personally, I liked how the poem turned out. I was always more of a free verse type of poem writing person anyways. =\
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~AkiraXKiraxa:iconAkiraXKiraxa: May 19, 2008, 5:09:15 PM
*had to look up "transgressive" and "erotic"*
Yeah, I'd say it's in the appropriate category.

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~AkiraXKiraxa:iconAkiraXKiraxa: May 19, 2008, 5:10:05 PM
Oh, and I like it too. : D
It's got some nice, descriptive language as well as the fact that the reader can really feel the mood that you, the author, depict.

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~HikariMimamoto:iconHikariMimamoto: May 20, 2008, 12:59:42 PM
....0_0;;; Uh...ok....

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~HikariMimamoto:iconHikariMimamoto: May 20, 2008, 12:59:54 PM
And thanks!^^

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